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I'm really excited today. I was walking outside one day and thought about how dark it was. The kind of dark where you're looking for shadows--something--to let you know it's safe to be outside.
What if you didn't need to be afraid?
Most of my stories start with some kind of "What If" to get me going. Then, if it gels, I start typing away.
This one gelled. Please tell me what you think of the opening scene. Does it make you want to read more? Tell me what it makes you think....
“Let there be light.” - God, The Bible
Supposedly, when God created the world, the first thing He created was Light. Then, would someone please tell me what the hell happened? Where did the light go?
As I walked into the room, the first thing I noticed was the darkness. Little hard not to—as it was absolute. Nothing could be seen. No shadows. No glimmers from beneath a door frame. Nothing—pitch black. Wasn’t that a movie title?
So, you’d figure that me, being a teenage girl, would be at least a little afraid, right? Well, maybe not so much as you might think. You see, I have this ability. Not one I tell many people about. I can create light. Not just a little glimmer of light at the end of a wand—you’ve read Harry Potter, right? Well, I can do that—and more—but I don’t need a wand at all. I can do these things with just a thought.
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Edit: typo fixed, thanks for telling me! Up to 2k words now. I think this one is going to be fun! Going to try for 10k words by bedtime.
Depending on what the rest of the story is about, I would probably read this. At the very least, I find myself curious! I'm especially interested in how the first sentence connects with the girl who can create light. Does this mean she's a god? What's going to happen with that power. It's pretty interesting! I do have to admit, though, that while the voice is quite clear and strong, the questions are really distracting. There are so many of them in such a short amount of reading.
ReplyDeleteAt any rate, good luck with this project! I look forward to seeing where you go from here!
Have peaked my curiosity enough that I would definitely pick it up and read it. I want to know where the light went. How can people function in complete dark. And why can't she tell anyone she can make light? Oh the questions. I want to read and find the answers!
ReplyDeleteYou have a little typo in there ...you're read Harry Potter... Otherwise, that was pretty catchy. I'd read it in a second.
ReplyDelete@HopeWelsh I read your blog paragraph and it's wonderful. Has me wanting to read more. Please be encouraged. Sincerely, Mrs. Harriet Oleson (this is from Mrs. Oleson on Twitter-she couldn't comment here--but I want her to have her entry.
ReplyDeleteThanks AR, Ursula and NR for the comments. Keep them coming!
I like that, I like the question "where did all the light go?" Keep going I think you have something special!
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Well, in my own WIP I've used a whole lot about Light and Dark (influenced by Bible verses) and people who can also create light, so I find this very interesting :-)
ReplyDeleteI'm also a crusader, doing the rounds of everyone's blogs and trying to follow everyone :-)
xx Rachel
Hi, I'm making crusader rounds. Nice to meet you, now following.
ReplyDeleteNikki
Hi, Hope. I'm a crusader wandering around all the blogs. I'm following you now.
ReplyDeleteGreat opening, Hope. I would want to read more.
ReplyDeleteYep, it's an excellent opening. Continue, please!
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